Without you ... A poem

[رجل الظل الطويل]

I hope u like this poem ... I wrote it kinna fast and I kept it simple so it would be more beautiful .... waintin 4 ur opinion
Many thanks

Without You

I realized when u was away
That time is me being without you
Life without you faints and shrinks
And the sea becomes red and the fire turns blue
The truth becomes lies and the lies become true
The life becomes black and white
Its not the absence of the hue
Its the absence of you

I begged my dead heart to throb back again
When u said that u left me and that u was plain
Its like being stabbed hard or crushed by a train
I thought like what did I get ... what did I gain
Nothing but sadness, misery, sickness and pain
If the sky bears my sadness, the clouds would start to rain

[كـــليوباترا]

amazing idea and i have to say that you have a nice feeling
but i think that there is some mistakes in some words
plz accept my opinion
best regards to you

[رجل الظل الطويل]

Many thanks Kileopatra ... but I hope that u refer to the words in which I have mistaken in order to get them corrected .............................thanks

[بســــــــ بغداد ـمـــــة]

very beautiful poem i like it so much

best wishes::57::

[رجل الظل الطويل]

very beautiful poem i like it so much

best wishes::57::

Thats so sweet of you ..... thank you very much

[WICKED WIZARD]

شششكرااا على الموضوع والكلمات
تقبل مروري

[رجل الظل الطويل]

شكرررررررررررا wicked wizard ......... على المرور الحلو

[.ROORA.]

great poem
thanxx for this nice effort
my regards
ROORA

[رجل الظل الطويل]

Thanks ROORA ....
I appreciate that...
The poem became more beautiful by adding ur sweet opinion

[زهرة الالم]

thanx amere
for the very effective poem
i like it so much
i am not looking for a spelling mistkes
i look inside the heart who carries
alot of beutiful feelings of love
sorrounded by sadness and pain
all in all to say
that i cannot live without you baby
it is very wonderful feelings
it is hurt sometimes but love still
stronger than all the sircumstances
and your love seems to me immortal
for one as you who has such feeling
never ever to loose the one he love
thanx alot for the amazing words
and soft feelings you share us here
keep it up
best wishes
regards from the heart bro
passion flower

[رجل الظل الطويل]

thanx amere
for the very effective poem
i like it so much
i am not looking for a spelling mistkes
i look inside the heart who carries
alot of beutiful feelings of love
sorrounded by sadness and pain
all in all to say
that i cannot live without you baby
it is very wonderful feelings
it is hurt sometimes but love still
stronger than all the sircumstances
and your love seems to me immortal
for one as you who has such feeling
never ever to loose the one he love
thanx alot for the amazing words
and soft feelings you share us here
keep it up
best wishes
regards from the heart bro

passion flower


I carry the same appreciation of yours
for your eyes
that see beyond the words
into someone's heart
thanks alot for your opinion
an opinion that happens to be a poem

[ToKiO hOtEl]

Well done honey ... it's sooooo adorable poem..
my best regards for you angel ... ::51::

[رجل الظل الطويل]

Well done honey ... it's sooooo adorable poem..
my best regards for you angel ... ::51::

Thanks for the sweet opinion
I appreciate that